Wednesday, 2 August 2017

For this piece of writing we learnt how to describe a place using the mnemonic(ISSFSOW)

My Bedroom



Oh my bedroom, what a wonderful place, please let me tell me tell you about my bedroom, the most brilliant place.


Around me lay clothes, so many clothes.  With the car bed filled to the brim with books.

The combination of strong perfume and stinky socks fills the air.  But that abomination of smells leads into the worst of all, my collection of chewed gum.


You would seem to be standing on a sea, soon you would realise it’s made out of dirty clothes. Latching onto my shredded bed cover you would be able to fell their agony.


Ticking violently my broken clock would remind you of a horror story.  Wind would be howling, thrashing my room.


The series of pictures on the wall shows how I looked centuries ago, the car bed forever reminding me of my 8th birthday.



Is there any other place like this, you should hope not.

I like the way I used the guide correctly
My next step is to make sure I make my sentences more impactful

Sunday, 23 July 2017

Speech Judging Sheet

Speech Judging Sheet


Name:Ansh                            Topic:  Speech                     
                   
Category
Main Points

Self Assessment
Low                                         High
1           2           3           4           5
Structure

 
My speech was organised logically into paragraphs, with an effective introduction and a conclusion.
3
Delivery

 
I used some gestures, stood still and made eye contact with my audience.

My voice was clear and loud.  I didn’t speak too quickly or too slowly.
            4


            3
Content
 
My speech had a message and was original, interesting and relevant to the audience.
4
Language

I used ‘powerful’ words in my speech.  I also included some language features (eg repetition, alliteration, similes etc)
5
Time

My speech was between 2 ½ and 3 ½ minutes long.
5


Next time I need to work on making more eye contact and connecting with the audience.

Wednesday, 28 June 2017

Speech-Why Being an Adult Stinks




II like the way I used a lot of humour
My next step is to use make better eye contact

Wednesday, 21 June 2017

Sleep Sleuths Solo Maps-50th Post

WALT- Write a DADWAVERS about our Inquiry

As I look around the severely congested classroom I identified a table full of dismembered parts of gadgets and vehicles.  I darted across the room feeling a little bit too nosy. “ANSH, NOT NOW!” Mr Tomokino exclaimed from the other side of the classroom.  See, it may have not been that far, but his voice sounded like a little squeak of a baby rat compared to the sounds of what seemed like 600 kids in the classroom.  When the time came to actually work with the items I hastily grabbed all the needed tools and began to disassemble my gadget, the USB Hard Drive.  My head began spinning as I struggled to think of how to take off the lid, then I had an epiphany, maybe I could use the legendary screwdriver?? ( Ok, ok, I know that it was obvious but let me have my moment).  I was having so much fun showing off to Krish and Akeel, simply because as soon as I came, progress had actually been made.  I felt so bad taking all the credit for my superior intellect(not really I basically did nothing) that I said they could remove the lid.  When we opened what we thought was the immortal lid, we found the hidden treasures; batteries and chips, and no, they were not Pringles, even though that would’ve been great.  We began experimenting by pulling out all that our muscles (not that we had any) would allow us to, creating many hazardous sparks along the way.  As time flew by, what was meant to be 30 minutes ended in, what I thought was a mere 3, but hey, who’s counting?     

Persuasive writing about camp

Pros Of Using Devices At Camp

“As you may know, this year at Halsey Drive School camp will begin on Tuesday, Week 4, Term 2 this year.  We will give out a slip for everything you need later today, but I will make I thing clear no devices!.” Said Mrs Ritchie.  Everyone started screaming, knowing that they couldn’t contact home unless necessary.    At first I was shocked, and slightly saddened, but I knew I couldn’t change anyone's mind so i went along with it.
But I still think we should be allowed devices at camp.  So here is my argument on why we should be allowed devices at camp.

Opinion:
My first reason/opinion is that if a major family event just happened how would the parents contact the kids without disturbing the staff,either they would have to call the emergency number at camp or drive all the way up there to tell them the news.  Now this could be really annoying and stressful for the person as they would have to leave whatever the event is and drive all the way to MERC just to drive back again.

Example:
One example is that some had been badly hurt or injured and they needed the  staff of MERC to know but they were busy and they couldn’t call the emergency number, they would have to drive up there and take their child while being asked way too many questions why, while, if their child brought his device he would have told all the staff and they would’ve calmly let him go instead of flooding their guardian with questions.

Opinion 2:  

My second reason is that you can use your device to send your pictures and videos to your family  to let them know that you are safe, because let's be real, you cant send anything, anywhere on a camera.

I like the way we used lots of persuasive language
Our next step is to make sure our sentences make sense  

Semester 1 Key Competencies

Key Competencies
(the capabilities required for living and lifelong learning)


Halsey Drive School
                    A = Almost Always
                                                               S = Sometimes
                                                          N = Not yet
1st half of the year
2nd half of the year
Student
Teacher
Student
Teacher
Managing Self

I am organised for the day
S
S


I am willing to try new things
A
A


I complete work to the best of my ability and show initiative
S
S


I begin work straight away, stay on task and work independently
A
A


I can set realistic goals and explain how to achieve them
A
A


I make sensible behaviour choices
S
A


I happily take part in all school activities
A
A


Relating to Others

I cooperate well with others when working
A
A


I treat others with respect
A
A


I am a good friend and role model - especially at break times
A
A


I show good manners and cooperate with others
A
A


Participating and Contributing

I share my ideas and opinions with others
S
S


I listen well to other people’s opinions
A
A


I take part in activities outside of the classroom
A
S


Thinking

I ask relevant questions to deepen my knowledge
S
S


I reflect on my own learning and say what I need to learn next
A
S


Language Symbols and Texts

I use a range of IT to share my learning
A
A